So after a little while, here are the rejigged versions of Bob Marley’s Donuts, both in black-and-white and in colour:

Bob Marley's Donuts revisited 10-3-13



Bob Marley's Donuts revisited colour 10-3-13

I think there are pros and cons to both versions of this: the black-and-white version is nice and clean, but would most likely be improved by a greater contrast of black in the image to break up the expanse of white, whereas the colour version is more vibrant but would benefit from increased shading. The flow of the strip is much improved by chopping down the number of panels, and I’m indebted to Lois Elsden for suggesting this narrative change.